Did you know that in 1980, 225,000 people died from aids? In total, 60 million people died from aids so far. Scientists predict that from 2000 to 2020, 68 billion people will prematurely die from a result of aids. In 2001, it claimed an estimated 3 million lives. I think it feels like being charred alive. In my opinion, I think people should work toward healthier lives.
I also think this is one of the reasons triggering the aids. In the Reauthorization Act of 2008, President Obama agreed to add $50 billion over 5 years for the HIV health funds. Aids are claimed to be the #1 death for women of a reproductive age in the entire world. This is probably because they are the women who are staying the unhealthiest. The CDC currently reported that 3% to 5% of the residents in Washington, DC are infected with aids. Today, people are being very careless about spreading diseases around the world. Which comes back to women being the unhealthiest. They don’t do anything to help out their bodies and then they spread it to the people around them. 75% of the people in America claimed they would never get a disease, (if any type) but caught it anyways.
I think people need to eat healthy, make the right choices, and stop doing drugs. Ways people can try this are setting their own goals for a healthier life. Or they could go to rehab for being too drunk. I also think people should stay safe. 1 person every 14 seconds is killed every single day. Also, if you do get hurt it will most likely make your aids worse. I know what it feels like to be sick, it hurts. This is all that is needed for a healthier life.
Aids- A disease to the immune system caused by a worse increase of other cancers.
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I like how you used the word charred, it really caught my attention.
The first thing that caught my attention is that "sufferation" isn't a word.
Secondly, if you look at the last line of your introduction, this is supposed to be your opinion on the AIDS issue (AIDS should be capitalized like this by the way). Your opinion says we should live healthier lives. Your whole second paragraph DOES talk about leading heathier lives, but I'm confused about what this has to do with AIDS. In other words, is your editorial supposed to convince of something about AIDS or leading a healthier life?
In your last paragraph, you have the "1 person every 14 seconds" statistic, but you should avoid stats here. There isn't any need for more evidence; only a call to action.
You did not explain what AIDS is.I
you never ever explained what AIDS are
The firsrt paragraph is okay. It expains people dying but it dosnt say much abot aids..
The second paragraph is okay again. It kinda sonds like a adult wrote it tho.
the last paragraph is good!! The 5th senance dosnt make alo of sense.. and you could make the closing sentance more creaive. overall its a good paper.
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