Tuesday, January 19, 2010

Off To Work?

250 million promises are broken, 250 million hearts are broken, and 250 million families are broken? Millions of kids ages five to seventeen, from Uzbekistan in Asia to the most remote villages in India. Have to go to work so they can give money to their families, instead of going to school. This is a world wide problem that will not just go away, it needs to be prohibited. Everyone can help in even the simplest ways; there is no reason why anyone should not do anything.

There are many reasons why this problem needs to be stopped. One reason is that the children have to work, they have no choice. The children do not decide if they are going to work the parents do. If the children are young they are tied to a loom so they will not run away, even if they are injured. Another reason is the children pass away and after a while it will begin to wipe out entire countries or cultures. Some of these countries are 50 percent in India,61 percent in Asia, 32 percent in Africa, 7 percent in Latin America, and more. Also the children are doing hazardous work that can hurt their social and development skills. 5 percent of children work in industries, but most children work in agriculture and construction, all very precarious jobs. If they live to become adults they would be very frail and unhealthy. Would you like to see generations dissolve because of child labor?

Therefore, this problem needs to be stopped. You can save up money to send to the children in these countries so they can send money to their families. We need to raise awareness about child labor, it certainly will not just go away on its own, and today is the day to help. There are many, many ways to help this problem, go find some. 250million promises restored, 250 million hearts restored, 250 million families restored.
Rachel L.

4 comments:

Anonymous said...

rachel, i like the sentence that other kids are tied to the loom.

LexieM said...

yours is really good!! the grabber is great..it also has lots of details and you can kinda see it happining in your head!!

salemmiddle6 said...

Gramatically, this paper is awesome!

It would be great for you to venture out and find some great statistics or particular places where this is happening. It would really help the reader envision this horrible situation if they knew where it was happening. Also, try using a thesaurus to venture out to find new and creative words to use to describe something this bad.

Manu K. said...

i really was hooked and wanted to keep reading this editorial as soon as i read the first sentence. good job!